Clear Technical Writing
Clear Action

Action Star 5

The generic verb cause can hide the Main Action in a sentence.

The heat might cause loosening of the solder joint.

Star might cause
[Action] of X

The heat might cause loosening of the solder joint.

The heat might loosen the solder joint.

Generic synonyms for the verb cause can act the same way.

accomplish:

The concentration adjustment is accomplished by changing the amount of solvent.

Star
[Action] is accomplished by X

The concentration adjustment is accomplished by changing the amount of solvent.

The concentration is adjusted by changing the amount of solvent.

achieve:

A fifty percent reduction in failures was achieved.


[Action] in Star was achieved

A fifty percent reduction in failures was achieved.

Failures were reduced by fifty percent.

complete:

An optimization of the design has been completed.


[Action] of Star has been completed

An optimization of the design has been completed.

The design has been optimized.

realize:

A solution for my spreadsheet problem was realized by naming cells.


[Action] for Star was realized by X

A solution for my spreadsheet problem was realized by naming cells.

My spreadsheet problem was solved by naming cells.

Edit your writing by underlining generic verbs and by highlighting Leading Stars and Main Actions.

High-performance concretes are caused by formulations with silica fume or quartz flour. Because of this, highway construction is accomplished with thinner sections and longer spans. Latex-modified overlays are used to achieve an extension in the life of deteriorating concrete bridge decks. Development of antifreeze additives was completed for pouring concrete during the winter. Significant improvements in performance may be realized with the use of nanoengineering techniques.

High-performance concretes are formulated with silica fume or quartz flour. Because of this, highways are constructed with thinner sections and longer spans. Latex-modified overlays extend the life of deteriorating concrete bridge decks. Antifreeze additives were developed for pouring concrete during the winter. Performance may be significantly improved with the use of nanoengineering techniques.

Lesson: Action Star 5
Module: Clear Action
Course: Clear Technical Writing